When writing is dull or difficult to read, it is sometimes due to the writer using unnecessary words or convoluted phrasing, perhaps in an attempt to sound more educated or businesslike.
For instance, stating “The hotel has a fitness suite and swimming amenities” instead of simply saying, “The hotel has a gym and swimming pool”. Similarly, “He works on a part-time basis” can be shortened to “He works part-time”. Instead of “Supplies are subject to limited availability” try “Supplies are limited”. See it’s easy to cut out the waffle! Here’s our list of some common culprits and suggestions on how they might be improved:
Attitude – as in “He adopted a defensive attitude”
He became defensive
Degree – as in “She showed a high degree of restraint”
She showed great restraint
Level – as in “The general level of conduct was satisfactory”
Generally, conduct was satisfactory
Manner – as in “He drove in a reckless manner”
He drove recklessly
Operation – as in “The automatic doors were not in operation”
The automatic doors were not working
Participation – as in “There was enthusiastic participation on the part of the members”
The members took part enthusiastically
Have you spotted any overly fussy abstract noun and adjective/adverb combinations recently? Let us know!
